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Entranced and encumbered, we waltz;
locked in a lucid dream, daring to fly.
A pale pearl orb floats, frigid,
soaking up the stars. The misplaced moon
begs to be returned -- raw,
impassive. I whisper whimsy,
treading thoughts, cracked glass, carefully.
Day 4 of #ProjectDFC's December Form Challenge.
DFC Form Chart 2013.

Form 4: Alliterisen

I have a love/hate relationship with alliteration. I love hearing it, and I love when it happens accidentally, but I can't purposefully alliterate anything worth crap. So. Sorry about the horrendous thing you just read.

EDIT:

12/06/13 -- reworded line 3.

#Glory-Be-Project
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haphazardmelody's avatar
Um. Not crap at all. I can see where maybe you would have chosen different words in a couple of places for the sake of flow...but honestly, I really love this. It's enigmatic and dark.